Comments for LEARNING HOW TO WRITE IN ENGLISH http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org Another excellent Edublogs.org weblog Mon, 08 Sep 2008 00:04:11 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 Comment on SPORTS AND POLITICS by mcfdf http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org/2008/09/05/sports-draft/comment-page-1/#comment-4 mcfdf Mon, 08 Sep 2008 00:04:11 +0000 http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org/?p=5#comment-4 Hi Pericles, Your second essay needs some comments: first, there are some sentences like 'They only care about some visible sports those will give them some exposure in the media in return' which need to be revised. Secondly, there are some long sentences like 'But we are a brave people, and we always can see some examples about someone that brakes all difficulties to do something to our sport, and these efforts reflect in our national spirit like we could see in this Olympics Games' that could be divided into two sentences. Thirdly, I believe that in the last paragraph you have turned the focus of your essay which is mostly the sports and the Opympic Games into a complaint about politics. Please, rewrite it. Your teacher!! Hi Pericles,

Your second essay needs some comments: first, there are some sentences like ‘They only care about some visible sports those will give them some exposure in the media in return’ which need to be revised. Secondly, there are some long sentences like ‘But we are a brave people, and we always can see some examples about someone that brakes all difficulties to do something to our sport, and these efforts reflect in our national spirit like we could see in this Olympics Games’ that could be divided into two sentences. Thirdly, I believe that in the last paragraph you have turned the focus of your essay which is mostly the sports and the Opympic Games into a complaint about politics. Please, rewrite it.
Your teacher!!

]]> Comment on FIRST WRITING ASSIGNMENT: NARRATIVE – REALITY by mcfdf http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org/2008/08/20/first-writing-assignment-narrative-reality/comment-page-1/#comment-3 mcfdf Sat, 30 Aug 2008 22:23:17 +0000 http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org/?p=4#comment-3 Hi Pericles, Your narrative was simple but very interesting. There were few grammar and spelling problems that we can discuss later!!! Your teacher!! Hi Pericles,

Your narrative was simple but very interesting. There were few grammar and spelling problems that we can discuss later!!!
Your teacher!!

]]> Comment on FIRST WRITING ASSIGNMENT: NARRATIVE – REALITY by Vander Chagas http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org/2008/08/20/first-writing-assignment-narrative-reality/comment-page-1/#comment-2 Vander Chagas Wed, 27 Aug 2008 12:00:52 +0000 http://periclesmsjr.edublogs.org/?p=4#comment-2 Hi Pericles, This message is just to let you know that I have just visited your blog. I hope we will have a lot of things to get from each other. If you really find out how to write in English, please, let me know that. Smiles... All the best to you! vander chagas Hi Pericles,
This message is just to let you know that I have just visited your blog.
I hope we will have a lot of things to get from each other.
If you really find out how to write in English, please, let me know that. Smiles…
All the best to you!

vander chagas

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